Thursday, March 5, 2015

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("Polynesia, the Sky" by Henri Matisse)




7 comments:

Charles Gramlich said...

LOvely

Charles Bane, Jr. said...

Joyous and perfectly crafted.

the walking man said...

I like Charles and Charles like this--but I see too many past tense words in it. It is hard to remain ringing to the joy of others before the ringing becomes a warning of one kind or another.

what i really want to know Sarah is where did you get the word tintinnabulation?

Sarah Hina said...

Charles, thank you. :)

Charles/Ann, I so appreciate your stopping by! This one came pretty easy for a change.

Mark, it comes from Poe! He wrote a poem about bells that's a lot more sinister than mine and coined the word out of thin air.

I suppose I intended mine to be an elegy for youth more than anything. Of not knowing then how long the clangs will reverberate or how much we will regret the muffling of age.

Unknown said...

Beautiful with a nice rhythm and nice imagery...I like the part that said "the women wore laughter and the men ere clappers"
It makes me think of weddings where everyone is supportive and happy to participate.

Aniket Thakkar said...

"Because bells
are contagious

and so were we"

^THAT feeling is what I've been searching for...

P.S. I agree with everything IBU RISKA said. Like totally! :P

Sarah Hina said...

Raj, thank you. I'm sorry I missed your comment before.

Aniket, this is actually a favorite of mine. I did what I set out to do here. 1/10, I can say that, maybe.