tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post1909603688393622150..comments2023-11-17T03:52:12.782-05:00Comments on murmurs: SurrenderSarah Hinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-82803281882196452622010-03-18T11:24:40.776-04:002010-03-18T11:24:40.776-04:00Tamarind~, yes, that was a bit of a whiplash, wasn...Tamarind~, yes, that was a bit of a whiplash, wasn't it? :) Thanks so much. <br /><br /><br />Aniket, it can, indeed. :) And it's amazing how just the thought of it can recreate the feeling so closely, too. <br /><br />Go take a cold shower. Or not. Sometimes, a little torture is sweet, am I right? :PSarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-79936815246091294992010-03-18T03:27:07.868-04:002010-03-18T03:27:07.868-04:00I'll need more than just a glass of water to c...I'll need more than just a glass of water to cool off!<br /><br />You should put a disclaimer to such posts: DO NOT read when you have company, especially company you can not make out with after reading. :P<br /><br />"like a stone<br />kissing water,<br />before its<br />dark plunge"<br /><br />Loved loved loved this comparison. It does feel that the stone kinda stays there on top just for a fraction of a second before it sinks, isn't it?Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-27605927174882448832010-03-17T23:43:32.394-04:002010-03-17T23:43:32.394-04:00Hey hey.. you changed the mood altogether :) So pa...Hey hey.. you changed the mood altogether :) So passionate!Tamarind~https://www.blogger.com/profile/06451187175850356692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-33973405589890073072010-03-15T23:15:29.005-04:002010-03-15T23:15:29.005-04:00Cat, I'm happy this one hit you at just the ri...Cat, I'm happy this one hit you at just the right time. :) Please, bathe away! The water's warm and sweet. If also a little intoxicating. <br /><br /><br />Joaquin, I'm glad you liked that break. Sometimes, those formatting experiments work...and sometimes they don't. But you got my intent entirely. :)<br /><br />"poetry without skin"--that's beautiful. Thank you.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-88222764132482125632010-03-15T22:38:09.579-04:002010-03-15T22:38:09.579-04:00wow. i need a drink of water after this one.
like ...wow. i need a drink of water after this one.<br />like karen said, it's so immediate - and the break before the last stanza - like that moment when your brain just kind of stops and your body takes over - this is poetry without skin.joaquin carvelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03193680725157157864noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-78186092355787363152010-03-15T10:04:00.468-04:002010-03-15T10:04:00.468-04:00For some reason this poem feels incredibly persona...For some reason this poem feels incredibly personal to me. ;-) I just want to bathe in these words and drink them in like the seductive elixir that they are. I love you Sarah Hina. You just keep letting that inner Puck out, it's SPRING!catvibehttp://www.catvibe.net/blognoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-68400294415710328002010-03-14T19:58:52.993-04:002010-03-14T19:58:52.993-04:00Bard, it's a little warm, if never warm enough...Bard, it's a little warm, if never warm enough. :) Thank you. <br /><br /><br />Karen, I had to go back and change a stanza. I was being more explicit than I intended to be (yes, I'm often oblivious, even to my own stuff). Then I re-read it and thought...ohhh, right. :) There's a thin, but critical line with metaphors! Especially in pieces like this.<br /><br />Anyway, I love what you shared in your reading. I do think poetry saturates us in feeling like prose can't. Coming from you, that kind of immersion experience means so much. Thank you, Karen.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-67392378081365568872010-03-14T08:22:02.504-04:002010-03-14T08:22:02.504-04:00I so admire you for being free enough to write lik...I so admire you for being free enough to write like this. I could not do it. No only could I not post it but I also could not produce this sort of description that takes the reader there - makes the lovemaking immediate. <br /><br />I read somewhere yesterday that poetry differs from prose in that it becomes personal to the reader regardless of intent of the writer - that even if the writing is "misinterpreted" in terms of the writer's own experience, it <i>becomes</i> the reader's experience as it is filtered through the her eyes. I think this only happens in good writing - writing that feels so natural that a reader is absorbed in it, able to experience it on a visceral level. That's the way I feel when I read your work. Always.Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-29812634026700642792010-03-14T03:06:35.722-04:002010-03-14T03:06:35.722-04:00Is it hot in here, or is it just me?Is it hot in here, or is it just me?bardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15130589527012329455noreply@blogger.com