tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post205901243723889593..comments2023-11-17T03:52:12.782-05:00Comments on murmurs: The Impossible DreamSarah Hinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-65181930115972522122008-07-24T10:20:00.000-04:002008-07-24T10:20:00.000-04:00Oh, I loved this. Sometimes as a youngster it is h...Oh, I loved this. Sometimes as a youngster it is hard to understand the unspoken. It reminds me of the importance of being clear with my own children. I don't want to ponder and be sad over perceived misunderstandings. This was a really lovely piece.Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-24934592985217794672008-07-22T16:44:00.000-04:002008-07-22T16:44:00.000-04:00Definitely!Definitely!Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-41863473577122799462008-07-21T23:35:00.000-04:002008-07-21T23:35:00.000-04:00Me with my flash and you with your strong spirit a...Me with my <I>flash</I> and you with your strong spirit and lily-of-the-valley. <BR/><BR/>Sounds like a great pair. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-48904678583297898592008-07-21T23:26:00.000-04:002008-07-21T23:26:00.000-04:00I know I've told you this before, I wanted to be A...I know I've told you this before, I wanted to be Anne of Green Gables!Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-79973877031617808582008-07-21T20:12:00.000-04:002008-07-21T20:12:00.000-04:00Vesper, there is always pain with looking too long...Vesper, there is always pain with looking too longingly back. It's probably better to recognize how far we've come. Thank you for your kindness. Again. :)<BR/><BR/>I actually did start a middle-grade novel several months ago, Sheri. It died soon after. But I would never say never. It's an invaluable age to write for, and some of my most prized memories are the novels I read when I was this age. <BR/><BR/>Yes, like L.M. Montgomery...I wanted to <I>be</I> Emily of New Moon when I grew up. <BR/><BR/>:)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-65790685237212367012008-07-21T19:29:00.000-04:002008-07-21T19:29:00.000-04:00Haha, That is funny. But this is EXACTLY why I wri...Haha, That is funny. But this is EXACTLY why I write for this age. The material is endless! All those emotions, and physical and mental changes, boys... girls... body changes, hormones... it doesn't get any better than that! <BR/><BR/>I think you might have a middle grade novel in you afterall!Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-85142288212008885852008-07-21T12:13:00.000-04:002008-07-21T12:13:00.000-04:00The grief is dense, almost physically painful. We ...The grief is dense, almost physically painful. We all have such moments in memory when not enough was said or done, moments out of our grasps forever...<BR/>Brilliant, Sarah!Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-31800601804236840192008-07-21T09:57:00.000-04:002008-07-21T09:57:00.000-04:00Thanks, Sarah. That tension can feel unbearable at...Thanks, Sarah. That tension can feel unbearable at times, especially when we can't escape. I'm glad it came across for you. <BR/><BR/>Thank you, Sheri! You're right, too--exactly 12 years old. <BR/><BR/>I think that's the age where things can become a muddle. We're more aware of our interests and character, and yet more doubtful of them, too. Too eager to please. That desperation can easily segue into insecurity and fear. <BR/><BR/>But why am I telling you this? This is your territory, anyway. ;)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-42926782734625898942008-07-20T22:31:00.000-04:002008-07-20T22:31:00.000-04:00I don't know who I feel more sorry for - Grandpa ...I don't know who I feel more sorry for - Grandpa or the granddaughter. <BR/><BR/>I loved the lines where she avoids looking at his skin cancer and he avoids looking at her breast buds, newly arrived. Without saying it, I already have a very good idea that she is maybe 12 or so give or take a few years. I love how this is how you tell us her age. Very clever and that you can still connect with these stages of life.<BR/><BR/>Beautiful!Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-83944386666815808362008-07-20T20:26:00.000-04:002008-07-20T20:26:00.000-04:00heartbreakingly beautiful; you made the tension in...heartbreakingly beautiful; you made the tension in that little boat so real. Well done Sarah.<BR/><BR/>quillSarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09714105691494151354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-54091353261642002842008-07-20T15:26:00.000-04:002008-07-20T15:26:00.000-04:00Thank you, Lena! And that's an interesting proposi...Thank you, Lena! And that's an interesting proposition to write the other side. I'll have to consider it. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-5967101927043950132008-07-20T10:58:00.000-04:002008-07-20T10:58:00.000-04:00amazing story! so touching and i wish to read gran...amazing story! so touching and i wish to read grand pa's version too :)Lenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09787400183444796423noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-30577010487900654032008-07-19T14:28:00.000-04:002008-07-19T14:28:00.000-04:00Thank you, Jason. I think what some young people s...Thank you, Jason. <BR/><BR/>I think what some young people struggle with is the idea that the imbalance requires correction. Feeling the responsibility of that burden. The necessity for disguises. None of it works, and in the effort, there is a harsher sense of failure. <BR/><BR/>But when we grow and become more honest and aware, then yes--those summer days are so rich with beauty, and potential. <BR/><BR/>Sameera, I hope you're having a good weekend, too. :) And thanks for the kind words about my writing!<BR/><BR/>I'm so glad you stopped by, Cinderella. And I appreciate the compliment. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-27933449302356933282008-07-19T13:51:00.000-04:002008-07-19T13:51:00.000-04:00Lovely piece of a very fertile imagination....!!Ni...Lovely piece of a very fertile imagination....!!<BR/><BR/>Nice reading you.<BR/>:)Cinderellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02977943098333681922noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-56440815435275892292008-07-19T11:28:00.000-04:002008-07-19T11:28:00.000-04:00That was so touching.I am in awe of your writing!H...That was so touching.I am in awe of your writing!<BR/><BR/>Have a great weekend :)Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-26587690468518502052008-07-19T11:11:00.000-04:002008-07-19T11:11:00.000-04:00One of the most gut-wrenching things I've read in ...One of the most gut-wrenching things I've read in a long time. Brutal in its subtlety. An entire tide pushing behind every word.<BR/><BR/>I don't know that Grandpa's version would be much better. But it would be different. It's the imbalance that makes me ache. She is perceptive of him and willing to bend, if he would only give her just enough understanding to dare to make the effort. But his vision is narrow. He's hoping to see what he wants to see.<BR/><BR/>Her strength lies in the fact there are other boats, and other ponds, and other people to share a summer day.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-31133286100154335692008-07-19T10:48:00.000-04:002008-07-19T10:48:00.000-04:00Thanks, JR. She was probably too young and inexper...Thanks, JR. She was probably too young and inexperienced to sense such a thing. But I'm sure you're correct. <BR/><BR/>Charles, that sense of sadness always comes when we get the timing wrong. Missed opportunities can weigh so heavily.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-3821325939456516562008-07-18T19:02:00.000-04:002008-07-18T19:02:00.000-04:00Very powerful. The sadness at the end was palable...Very powerful. The sadness at the end was palable.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-84322993024651860722008-07-18T17:53:00.000-04:002008-07-18T17:53:00.000-04:00Very poetic. I agree with aine about the disconne...Very poetic. I agree with aine about the disconnect... Grandpa's version may be subtly different.JR's Thumbprintshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10479324326541901987noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-74808081137184842082008-07-18T17:16:00.000-04:002008-07-18T17:16:00.000-04:00That's a brilliant insight, Aine. You're likely ri...That's a brilliant insight, Aine. You're likely right, you know. <BR/><BR/>The weight of the day could have been very different on his side. Her notion of their disconnect--that unbearable unspokenness--might have just been a gentle, shared silence for him.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-34636397817054998792008-07-18T15:51:00.000-04:002008-07-18T15:51:00.000-04:00I'd love to hear Grandpa's version-- I bet it woul...I'd love to hear Grandpa's version-- I bet it would surprise her.<BR/><BR/>Nothing bothers me more than disconnect. You captured the awkwardness brilliantly...Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.com