tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post4376467323548187277..comments2023-11-17T03:52:12.782-05:00Comments on murmurs: CloserSarah Hinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-66135657977504021302011-12-27T09:57:39.867-05:002011-12-27T09:57:39.867-05:00No need to apologize, Cat! I probably should use t...No need to apologize, Cat! I probably should use the G+ feature: I just don't want people feeling obligated to check something out.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-7008355168085830782011-12-27T06:18:11.260-05:002011-12-27T06:18:11.260-05:00I only wish you'd use the notify feature when ...I only wish you'd use the notify feature when you post these on G+ because I just don't always see stuff right away otherwise. :-( Sorry it took me so long to get here for this and your poem.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-49149561001603903672011-12-26T22:54:22.758-05:002011-12-26T22:54:22.758-05:00Wow, Cat, I'm amazed it affected you that much...Wow, Cat, I'm amazed it affected you that much. Thank you.<br /><br />AND thanks for sharing the story on G+: it was a wonderful, belated Christmas gift to see a new batch of readers hop over here tonight! :)<br /><br /><br />Tony, it's great to see you stop by! And I'm honored that you're linking to it from FB. Thanks!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-79800060297535993242011-12-26T22:15:23.554-05:002011-12-26T22:15:23.554-05:00sarah... i'm speechless... it's that good!...sarah... i'm speechless... it's that good!<br /><br />more... please?<br /><br />[cat, thx for posting it on +!]<br /><br />[sarah, i'm putting it on my fb page]laughingwolfhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08873675614347328116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-12864603312135555412011-12-26T21:14:28.640-05:002011-12-26T21:14:28.640-05:00oh, I"m sitting here reading this, my hands c...oh, I"m sitting here reading this, my hands cupping my face as my head draws closer and closer to the screen in the shortening string of connection she is feeling with this Christopher person. Gripping! Just wow on the tension factor.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-54923546854094060832011-12-21T10:38:36.454-05:002011-12-21T10:38:36.454-05:00Aniket, it's a little scary because I haven...Aniket, it's a little scary because I haven't been having as many story ideas come to me lately. Some of that is the novel, a lot of that is the busyness of the kids' schedules lately, but a good chunk of it is that I haven't been open to the notion. I've become complacent. Throwing a vignette up here makes me realize how much I've missed the thrill of writing something fully realized in a short amount of time. <br /><br />Truthfully? I think she wrote, "I love you." Or "I'm sorry." Or "I wish..." But she firmly believes the story's better without our knowing. ;)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-49838504473765273102011-12-21T08:29:47.436-05:002011-12-21T08:29:47.436-05:00This is what happens when people who love Before S...This is what happens when people who love Before Sunrise/Before Sunset write a heart-breaking piece. I'm guessing we'll have to wait another 10 yrs to know what happens next? Did she write 'I'm with Stephen'?<br /><br />"Her foot pushed a nonexistent pedal." --- I sooo know this feeling. I didn't get to say what I wanted to say though. And I'm not sure if it was a bad thing.<br /><br />I'm glad you wrote this. You should go out more. :)Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-39340584141150546812011-12-20T22:38:03.375-05:002011-12-20T22:38:03.375-05:00Charles, that means a lot to me. Thank you.
Rick...Charles, that means a lot to me. Thank you. <br /><br />Rick, I'm so lazy about submitting! Maybe that'll be my New Year's Resolution. :)<br /><br />I sincerely appreciate the invitation.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-49407449190173866942011-12-20T20:55:55.462-05:002011-12-20T20:55:55.462-05:00You know, you just have to submit to White Cat Mag...You know, you just have to submit to White Cat Magazine. Really. We actually pay writers!Rickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14546882686381428986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-7951574801528048662011-12-20T11:05:42.191-05:002011-12-20T11:05:42.191-05:00Dynamite from start to finishing. Wow, you know ho...Dynamite from start to finishing. Wow, you know how to hook a reader.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-5029142853250377482011-12-20T09:39:04.535-05:002011-12-20T09:39:04.535-05:00Steve, thanks for pointing out all the chaotic pus...Steve, thanks for pointing out all the chaotic pushes and pulls in the piece. I liked playing with the idea of fate/control, too. <br /><br />I <i>should</i> do more of these. Yer right. (Don't let it go to your head.) <br /><br /><br />Mark, wow, thanks for that link. I might throw something out there. <br /><br />It's really good to see you here. I always appreciate your thoughts.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-24303782391339558552011-12-20T08:13:46.008-05:002011-12-20T08:13:46.008-05:00Take a look at this. Today is the last day for sub...<a href="http://www.whitecatpublications.com/?p=1091" rel="nofollow">Take a look at this. Today is the last day for submission</a> I liked the ebb and flow of the tension and the very subtle explanation of why it was so, nice bit o writin' Sarah.the walking manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10058913927297370740noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-5467368568520098602011-12-20T03:52:24.418-05:002011-12-20T03:52:24.418-05:00This story is full of subtle conflict, which is wh...This story is full of subtle conflict, which is what makes a story great. The tension between the protagonist and Christopher is the structural glue, but there is also the traffic jam, and Toby off in his own little world. And the swollen belly.<br /><br />My favorite metaphor: <i>The flashing brake lights were arrhythmic</i><br /><br />I know what she wrote in the condensation, but I'm not telling.<br /><br />You should do more of these. Don't make me come over there and sit on you.Stephen Parrishhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16883165490847664389noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-84002791586775832792011-12-19T23:06:22.586-05:002011-12-19T23:06:22.586-05:00Wendy, I appreciate that. I was shocked to look ba...Wendy, I appreciate that. I was shocked to look back at my archives (such as they are now) and see that I hadn't written a vignette in over a year. It felt good to stretch those muscles again.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-91060442723417321382011-12-19T22:54:44.125-05:002011-12-19T22:54:44.125-05:00Wow, Sarah. I love this and was on the edge of my...Wow, Sarah. I love this and was on the edge of my seat. Tense and yearning and fabulously heart-wrenching.Wendyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03115002505324651653noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-51776572846407686342011-12-19T22:33:37.547-05:002011-12-19T22:33:37.547-05:00Richard, I like your take on it. Thank you.Richard, I like your take on it. Thank you.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-26266580821063732742011-12-19T17:57:29.679-05:002011-12-19T17:57:29.679-05:00Thanks, Sarah. A lovely, heartbreaking moment. If ...Thanks, Sarah. A lovely, heartbreaking moment. If she changed her name, I think she wrote her new one.<br /><br />:::Because I still believe in happy endings:::Richard Levangiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16596356126446766607noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-26587631980084111102011-12-19T16:26:08.418-05:002011-12-19T16:26:08.418-05:00Mark, thanks for reading.
JA, I had this idea du...Mark, thanks for reading. <br /><br />JA, I had this idea during a long drive to my MIL's this weekend. I was taken by the idea of this amazing, astronomical thing happening during the most irritating circumstances possible. <br /><br />Thanks for everything you said! I'm not sure what she wrote. But I imagine it had to be less than 140 characters. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-63097055346206669362011-12-19T15:20:27.042-05:002011-12-19T15:20:27.042-05:00Oh, wow. This is gripping and heartbreaking and ju...Oh, wow. This is gripping and heartbreaking and just so well done. I am in that car, I am with her, I am invested. <br /><br />(What did she write, what did she write, WHAT DID SHE WRITE.)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-49230741790702825592011-12-19T14:13:28.012-05:002011-12-19T14:13:28.012-05:00That's some thingamajig you wrote. Thanks fo...That's some thingamajig you wrote. Thanks for sharing itmarkhttp://radio-nowhere.org/nb/noreply@blogger.com