tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post7930779563410939851..comments2023-11-17T03:52:12.782-05:00Comments on murmurs: Letters (Part Six)Sarah Hinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comBlogger16125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-64281853372096115642009-02-22T04:03:00.000-05:002009-02-22T04:03:00.000-05:00I hope he does get home! :)I am too engrossed in t...I hope he does get home! :)<BR/>I am too engrossed in the story now to comment on your writing skills.... sorry! Off to the next one to know where its going! :)Aniket Thakkarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311954967682696734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-49043056882594179722009-01-16T22:13:00.000-05:002009-01-16T22:13:00.000-05:00Thank you for the vote of confidence, K! I'm still...Thank you for the vote of confidence, K! I'm still uncertain, but your outline sounds like what I envisioned. <BR/><BR/>I feel like there's been no time to think over the concept lately, but I'm not going to let it die without pondering some more. Maybe the characters will let me know. ;) <BR/><BR/>I will keep you updated! :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-71213995786328090562009-01-16T20:53:00.000-05:002009-01-16T20:53:00.000-05:00Yes, perhaps prefacing the chapters with the first...Yes, perhaps prefacing the chapters with the first person pov letters, then writing the chapters in third-person omniscient - developing in the chapters what can't be understood merely from the letters.....<BR/><BR/>If anyone can make it work, you can!K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-4364581096165375602009-01-15T22:43:00.000-05:002009-01-15T22:43:00.000-05:00K, you read my mind (as usual)! I have thought of ...K, you read my mind (as usual)! <BR/><BR/>I have thought of turning this series into a book. I don't think it would work as a purely epistolary novel, but to start each chapter with a letter, and alternate the characters' stories is a possibility. <BR/><BR/>I have anxiety about setting a novel in another time, though. Making it, and a war experience, read authentic. I can be very impatient (read, lazy) with research. ;) <BR/><BR/>And yet, I am considering it. Once my revisions for this novel are finally done! Ugh. ;)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-22373626810618210412009-01-15T22:01:00.000-05:002009-01-15T22:01:00.000-05:00Yay!!! He's going home. I am anxious to know wha...Yay!!! He's going home. I am anxious to know what fate will befall them! I am worried about Patrick...will he be too ill to make it home? Illustrious writing, Sarah. Maybe this could be developed into a novel? ;)K.Lawson Gilberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11204234196229710524noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-57589476846638001132009-01-15T12:56:00.000-05:002009-01-15T12:56:00.000-05:00Jennifer, thank you again! I do love getting feedb...Jennifer, thank you again! I do love getting feedback myself, so I like to do the same for others. <BR/><BR/>I'm so behind right now, though. Jason's never had such a big contest before! Which is really cool. :) Thanks, Jennifer, for letting me know you appreciated my comments. And I am going to get to your blog as soon as I can snatch a minute of time! <BR/><BR/>Vesper, you're right. Anything could happen still. But the end is so tantalizingly close (I think--can't quite see around the bend myself). Thank you for pointing out that fragment--it was meaningful to me, too. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-2009985039035727222009-01-15T12:52:00.000-05:002009-01-15T12:52:00.000-05:00Cat, I think I like these characters too much to m...Cat, I think I like these characters too much to make it too painful, although I do want it to be honest, too. I'm still figuring it out...<BR/><BR/>And thanks about my Halo entry! That is still a favorite of mine. Just because it was one of the first pieces of flash I wrote. I appreciate your wonderful support, Cat. It really does mean a lot to me. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-20919031763718409972009-01-15T12:16:00.000-05:002009-01-15T12:16:00.000-05:00Good… there’s better hope now, still tinged by fea...Good… there’s better hope now, still tinged by fear of this illness… A few weeks is a long time…<BR/><BR/><I>I see now that the truth is our strongest tether. Because it’s a straight line. Not curved, like even the kindest deception. Never seeing what’s around the bend.</I> - I love this fragment!Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-70892036707660223402009-01-15T08:26:00.000-05:002009-01-15T08:26:00.000-05:00Hi again. Yes, "Translation" was mine. I wanted ...Hi again. Yes, "Translation" was mine. I wanted to thank you not just for the comments you left for my entry, but for the other entries as well. It was so clear that you really thought about the pieces and offered supportive and specific comments to each. What a wonderful thing to do for your fellow writers!jazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09559917865938143791noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-7896210843974647362009-01-15T07:11:00.000-05:002009-01-15T07:11:00.000-05:00Sarah, I am afraid to find out what his coming hom...Sarah, I am afraid to find out what his coming home will look like, but I do hope for them. <BR/><BR/>I just read your Halo entry. It really is beautiful writing, as is all of your writing.Catherine Viberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01354073276671196477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-74535411947304688502009-01-14T15:04:00.000-05:002009-01-14T15:04:00.000-05:00Jennifer, thank you so much for stopping by! I rea...Jennifer, thank you so much for stopping by! <BR/><BR/>I really appreciate your going back to take a look at my Halo entry. It was my first contest of Jason's, and will always be special to me. So it means a lot to hear your kind words. Thank you. :) <BR/><BR/>Was "Translation" your entry? It if was, I loved it. Just my kind of writing. And a beautiful ending, too.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-52081742941480007592009-01-14T11:11:00.000-05:002009-01-14T11:11:00.000-05:00Hi Sarah,This is really lovely. I followed the lin...Hi Sarah,<BR/>This is really lovely. <BR/><BR/>I followed the link from the Ascension contest and that made me go back and read your Halo entry. I am what, a couple of years late?? :) But I just wanted to tell you that it is hauntingly beautiful. Truly amazingjazhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09559917865938143791noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-30005310399983674622009-01-13T12:52:00.000-05:002009-01-13T12:52:00.000-05:00Ello, thanks for pointing out that line! Things ar...Ello, thanks for pointing out that line! <BR/><BR/>Things are going well. Almost done with the novel revisions (yay!), though I dragged my feet for too long. Hope everything is going well for you, too! :) <BR/><BR/>Jason, I've thought about those expectations, and how sweet, and misleading, anticipation can be. Maybe more for her, though. <BR/><BR/>I'm thinking of capping off the series with at least one vignette, because I'm curious to see how it comes about. I'm rooting for them, too. :) <BR/><BR/>Charles, I'm so glad you've found something worth liking here. I've grown to really like the characters, even if I don't feel like I'm doing justice to the time period and circumstances. Thank you for enjoying it!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-50593729193149674392009-01-13T11:27:00.000-05:002009-01-13T11:27:00.000-05:00"To find a head for normalcy." Wonderfully said. ..."To find a head for normalcy." Wonderfully said. This is really a fine series.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-31098164956782709272009-01-13T10:34:00.000-05:002009-01-13T10:34:00.000-05:00...so I don’t have to inhale the bodily juices of ...<I>...so I don’t have to inhale the bodily juices of all my fellow sardines.</I><BR/><BR/>I really felt for him with his descriptions of the ward. And blood having a memory. That's a great insight.<BR/><BR/>As much as I look forward to him being home, I also worry about the immense pressure of the reality of the homecoming. I hope they bask in what happens and don't implode by everything that's not quite right or missing.<BR/><BR/>I'm rooting for them. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-86766371299828087292009-01-13T09:51:00.000-05:002009-01-13T09:51:00.000-05:00I love the line "Not curved, like even the kindest...I love the line "Not curved, like even the kindest deception." It's beautiful!<BR/><BR/>How is everything else going? Am excited to hear all the details!Ello - Ellen Ohhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18311917335471167591noreply@blogger.com