tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post8770956475013905717..comments2023-11-17T03:52:12.782-05:00Comments on murmurs: The Darkness of OneSarah Hinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-31866704738331626982008-06-26T18:43:00.000-04:002008-06-26T18:43:00.000-04:00I think hope always comes again, Vesper--if we ope...I think hope always comes again, Vesper--if we open the door and let it. <BR/><BR/>And thank you. :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-16874246495764541652008-06-26T12:02:00.000-04:002008-06-26T12:02:00.000-04:00This feels extremely real, Sarah - like all your w...This feels extremely real, Sarah - like all your writings, in fact.<BR/>I think I know this feeling of end of possibilities. Very sad, yet I believe that with time hope will come again... I hope so.<BR/>Beautifully written.Vesperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12417602625059442986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-37750380067529541102008-06-25T00:03:00.000-04:002008-06-25T00:03:00.000-04:00That's the best compliment a writer can get, Ruth....That's the best compliment a writer can get, Ruth. To forge a connection between reader and character is what we all try to do. <BR/><BR/>Thank you! :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-22087188521714213682008-06-24T11:58:00.000-04:002008-06-24T11:58:00.000-04:00Incredibly well paced. Her pain was palpable. You ...Incredibly well paced. Her pain was palpable. You made me care about her.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-58840083772708409542008-06-24T11:05:00.000-04:002008-06-24T11:05:00.000-04:00Chris, you're right--this is probably the darkest ...Chris, you're right--this is probably the darkest piece I've written for the blog. I think the essence I was going for was a numbed absence after being handed the world. I'm glad you thought it succeeded in showing that. :) <BR/><BR/>Scott, some couples have it so hard. It's really not fair. To want something so badly, and work at it for so long, and still come up empty has got to be a brutal experience. I hope that your friends' marriage hasn't been degraded in the process.<BR/><BR/>My pleasure, Bernita. It was fun. :)<BR/><BR/>And thanks!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-48860184516472381992008-06-24T09:31:00.000-04:002008-06-24T09:31:00.000-04:00Brutal.Brilliant.And thank you for supporting the ...Brutal.<BR/>Brilliant.<BR/><BR/>And thank you for supporting the Roast yesterday, Sarah.Bernitahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05264585685253812090noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-31064635818206066632008-06-24T08:02:00.000-04:002008-06-24T08:02:00.000-04:00Whoa. It's like this was real. I have a friend w...Whoa. It's like this was real. I have a friend who has tried with his wife so many times, for years, to have a baby, and they couldn't stand to be around people (like my wife and me) who constantly talk about how cute their children are. It really makes me thankful to be where I am at today. The bitter irony is that we weren't even trying.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-47666735020232741662008-06-23T23:22:00.000-04:002008-06-23T23:22:00.000-04:00This is painful to read. The ending felt true to t...This is painful to read. The ending felt true to this experience. I have a friend who went through something similar, and I think you captured its essence.<BR/>There seems to be always a touch of darkness in your writing, which I really like. This one is more heavily coated...Chris Eldinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11794946908789120139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-82989649615233972602008-06-23T14:48:00.000-04:002008-06-23T14:48:00.000-04:00I've never experienced a miscarriage either, Aine,...I've never experienced a miscarriage either, Aine, but I imagine it's impossible not to feel that void--that absence of a dreamed-of future--at every moment in the days and months afterward. <BR/><BR/>Being alone is dark. We all fight it, I think, until it's either forced upon us, or we just succumb to a dreary choice and call it "fate."<BR/><BR/>You're right to be scared for these characters. But you're also right to still have hope. We never know what the future will bring. There's some light in that.Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-49258041497492767012008-06-23T13:55:00.000-04:002008-06-23T13:55:00.000-04:00Though I thankfully have not experienced this, her...Though I thankfully have not experienced this, her questioning of every possible cause rings so true.<BR/><BR/><I>For she had lost him, too. The only number she understood now was alone.</I><BR/><BR/>There are so many possible moments in life when this is a raw fact. I fight this with every fiber of my being (perhaps because I came into the world a twin...), but the reality is that there are times when we are simply alone. <BR/><BR/>I am scared for them. I hope they find each other in the darkness.Ainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08402176500997528105noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-30794646295961769672008-06-23T12:54:00.000-04:002008-06-23T12:54:00.000-04:00Thanks, Jason.Not every story can have that happy ...Thanks, Jason.<BR/><BR/>Not every story can have that happy ending. I didn't want to leave her in the dark, or her husband out there, still calling for her. But it felt true to the moment. <BR/><BR/>I can only hope that in such cases, light and fulfillment come again. <BR/><BR/>I almost feel the need to apologize, Hoodie. You shouldn't have to read about this, now. <BR/><BR/>You're right: the road you're on is so difficult, especially with other kids to take care of. Just because someone might envy you doesn't mean that it's an enviable state to be in. It <I>is</I> hard. And impossible to be thankful all the time. <BR/><BR/>But I know your baby is so lucky to have you...<BR/><BR/>Now go rest! :)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-46273737840980369082008-06-23T12:35:00.000-04:002008-06-23T12:35:00.000-04:00This is hard for a pregnant girl to read.Yesterday...This is hard for a pregnant girl to read.<BR/><BR/>Yesterday a lady told me that there are people out there who would give everything to be able to have the experience I'm having. I told her that at times it feels like I am giving everything. It's a hard road.<BR/><BR/>But I am grateful. I am.<BR/><BR/>The imagery was heartbreaking.Hoodiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17616427797201977083noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-71554767255963121382008-06-23T11:10:00.000-04:002008-06-23T11:10:00.000-04:00What a powerful ending. That image--the closing d...What a powerful ending. That image--the closing door. Pulling with her foot.<BR/><BR/>I'm afraid for her. And for everyone around her. That fire of unfulfillment and crushed dreams and identity will consume a lot before it goes out. If it ever does.<BR/><BR/>Great pacing and language here. It felt very natural. And still unique.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com