tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post905118624805670375..comments2023-11-17T03:52:12.782-05:00Comments on murmurs: Lay Your Head DownSarah Hinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-19531265263823397532008-08-06T16:08:00.000-04:002008-08-06T16:08:00.000-04:00A bit garlicky, Sheri. ;)A bit garlicky, Sheri. ;)Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-44368275258887848422008-08-05T12:02:00.000-04:002008-08-05T12:02:00.000-04:00A burb from teh past - HA! Did it have an after ta...A burb from teh past - HA! Did it have an after taste too?Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-41863081597967656422008-08-01T15:40:00.000-04:002008-08-01T15:40:00.000-04:00I'm sorry it's taken me so long to reply to commen...I'm sorry it's taken me so long to reply to comments! I was out of town for a couple of days. <BR/><BR/>I'm going to be honest here, guys: I wrote this piece a few months ago, and I think it shows. I've been trying to clean up my writing, and lighten up on the lyrical flights of fancy slightly. <BR/><BR/>My thought process here was just to show that connections run deep, and are everything. Even when we don't have the time or inclination to honor them due to feelings of isolation and outside obligations, they still manage to lead us home.<BR/><BR/>Obviously, I could have made that a little bit clearer. But this was a burp from the past. ;) <BR/><BR/>Thank you for your comments, everyone!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-351221803545567992008-07-30T17:36:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:36:00.000-04:00Oh - I also wanted to say, it kinda of felt like a...Oh - I also wanted to say, it kinda of felt like a nightmare too. I really loved the lines about the only shadow left on the platform was something like her, with all the color leaked out.<BR/><BR/>I think I might have felt that way once in my life.Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-30086933085963442572008-07-30T17:34:00.000-04:002008-07-30T17:34:00.000-04:00Sometimes, I hear your beautiful words, but am not...Sometimes, I hear your beautiful words, but am not always positive what they mean... Does she have a gambling problem? Sorry if I am really off? Is she being pulled to the track, but her heart strings are pulling her home?Sheri Perl-Oshinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08025716805041579831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-23291072689046687372008-07-30T09:05:00.000-04:002008-07-30T09:05:00.000-04:00The words are beautiful and the descriptions sharp...The words are beautiful and the descriptions sharp. At first I didn't understand what was going on, but if I am reading this right, she works at a horse track where the money is counted and desperately needs... Yes, I see it now. Wonderful.<BR/><BR/>Sorry, as I wrote the comment I was reading passages again and thought I would show my process.<BR/><BR/>Loved the last two lines.Scotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13323167263283798566noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-51503081896092648752008-07-30T00:17:00.000-04:002008-07-30T00:17:00.000-04:00Very nice. I like the surrealistic elements. Ver...Very nice. I like the surrealistic elements. Very visual. I saw this almost as a movie.Charles Gramlichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02052592247572253641noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-360881513192098142008-07-29T23:06:00.000-04:002008-07-29T23:06:00.000-04:00What a lovely thing to say, Sameera. :) Thank you!...What a lovely thing to say, Sameera. :) Thank you!Sarah Hinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13888406261817690010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2133579337316674953.post-76378979182258474852008-07-29T17:08:00.000-04:002008-07-29T17:08:00.000-04:00I could feel the string tightening around my heart...I could feel the string tightening around my heart as I read it.<BR/><BR/>Wonderful description!<BR/><BR/>*Applause*Sameera Ansarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05249126041067834608noreply@blogger.com